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Originally posted by Ponycar_302
No it isn't. The subject of a paper is revealed in the first sentence. Your subject and conclusion are two different topics.
That is your topic. You only covered one of your topic points in the body of the paper; the health effects. You failed to cover how it causes pollution WHEN COLD and how it ATTEMPTS TO WORK WHEN HOT.
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Lemme dumb it down for you there, Einstein. When she was talking about catalytic converters producting nitrous oxide, and other harmful chemicals, that would be considered pollution.
Pollution: The act or process of polluting or the state of being polluted, especially the contamination of soil, water, or the atmosphere by the
discharge of harmful substances.
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It was not a colloquial piece; it was a formal piece. For instance, you described what a cat was in simple terms so anyone could understand. In colloquial, or informal, writing you would have said it was a round thingy filled with some sort of chemicals and such.
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Describing it in simple terms like she did would have made the piece colloquial, not formal.
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I have a BS/MS PHD in Critical Thinking and Writing. For a highschool piece this is a good paper. Let us know what you get on it. I know what you originally intended with it. When I answered I was just expanding on the subject, as I am now. I never meant to offend you, Belle.
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If you were an elementary school teacher in reading and writing, you'd probably perform adaquately. At home courses for which you earn your degree's with a C- average are unimpressive.
I happend to notice you telling her to post sources for her information about 4 1/2 hours after she did. Are your reading skills that much worse than your writing skills Mr. Degree?
As far as me leghumping, I agree or disagree with points made, and give MY opinion on them. Just because my opinion happens to be the same as somebody elses does not mean I'm leg humping. If I were to follow on every post
Mustangbelle306 made, agreeing with every comment, then I would be leghumping. Instead, I just choose to pick on people who obviously know little about what they are talking about. It makes it easier. Like what I'm doing with you right now. You are certainly correct about me being blunt, and rude on occation. I just have a low tolerance for people who think they know more than they do.