Is this a good Start for a short story?

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I like it. You've got a real gift for creative writing. Post the whole thing when you're done...unless you're planning to publish it. If so, then I'll buy a copy.

I think it would be great to have a book or story in which the author conveyes a knowledge of cars in the same way that Tom Clancy conveys his expertise on military tactics and munitions. You read his books, and you're there. You know exactly what weapons they are using and exactly what their tactics are. It's not like "John pulled out his gun and shot the bad man...." It's very detailed and descriptive.

On the same line, I would love a book that continued the detail of your intro. Instead of "Bubba hopped in his fast truck and headed to the fields," go ahead and go into detail like you've done. You know, not have the whole book be strictly about hot-rods or anything like that, but have a definate undertone of automobile know-how in there.

Good job, man. I look forward to seeing more of it.

--nathan