Is this a good Start for a short story?

[Mercury]

Originally posted by silver_pilate
It's not like "John pulled out his gun and shot the bad man...." It's very detailed and descriptive.

"Bubba hopped in his fast truck and headed to the fields," go ahead and go into detail like you've done.

--nathan

LMAO

Man, I got a laugh out of that. I use to write short scary stories way back when I was like 6-10 years old. Thats what they were like.

Someone I use to know that majored with me in Advertising Design/Fine Arts use to write. After I bugged them for the longest time to let me read there stuff, I never asked again. It was also like that.

He pulled the trigger. Boom. The man died. I still remember that line. What made it so bad is the person CLAIMED to be a writer that had stuff published under a Pen Name. Um...Yeah..Right.

TireBurner.
No man, I didnt see the story you wrote. If you want go ahead and e-mail it to me. I'd love to read it.