Is this a good Start for a short story?

[mustangman65_79]

Here's your story with a little bit of me.


With keys dangling from his mouth, Frank hurriedly grabbed a six pack from the cooler and headed out the door. Humid southern air greeted him as he closed the screen door behind him, leaving a bead of sweat on the it.

Tossing the six pack in the back along with his stained cap, Frank slid onto the aged vinyl seats and fumbled with the keys to get them out of his mouth. Then as smoothly as possible, put the keys in the ignition. With a twist of the key, and spin of the starter, current flowed through the corroded ignition points. The 389 came alive, breathing through 2 of the 6 venturi’s.
Patting the dash with satisfaction he whispered under his breath” That’s right honey. Me and you are going to have some good times.”

Sliding the Hurst shifter into first and easing the clutch and gas he pulled out of his driveway, the evening sun hitting him hard in the eyes. No more work today, no girlfriend tonight; no plans, no worries, the shackles and weights had been removed. Freedom. Friday evening was an open book with blank pages waiting to be filled.



How does this sound???

If u want, I can try to help u with this. Other wise, it looks like u can do it yourself.